Concetti Chiave
- The essay discusses two methods of influencing young adults: setting rules and providing advice.
- Advice can often be ignored by adolescents who feel misunderstood and believe parents are too old to understand them.
- Rules help in maturing a child's conscience by distinguishing right from wrong, but excessive punishment can harm decision-making abilities.
- The author believes that setting rules is the best way to influence young people, as they encounter rules everywhere in life.
- The content is relevant, well-explained, with a balanced argument, though the use of imperative form is seen as a weakness.
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Essay
Many parents, struggle with bringing up their child into be responsible adults and are unsure about how to influence them. There are of course, many ways of influencing young adults, and I want to present and discuss two of them: giving rules to obey and offering your children advice.First of all, it has to be said that advice is easy to ignore, and that children especially in their adolescent years, don’t even want advice, and will tell you so, too: ‘I don’t need your help’, they will say to you or even shout at you. Kids often feel misunderstood they think their parents can’t understand them, because they are ‘too old’. If your son or daughter has a problem, it is important to make him or her feel that you do understand and only want their best and are, therefore, offering some advice, hoping it will help them. Then again, there are rules. Rules can be placed differently, they don’t need to be a stone-hard barrier to your child’s freedom. Adolescents will often bend rules or utterly break them all because they need this certain feeling of rebellion and freedom. Rules also help the maturing of the conscience. If a child doesn’t need to follow rules, it’s conscience will never mature, and it will not know wrong from right. If, however you place rules, and punishments should they not be followed, your son or daughter will learn not to steal, to be home on time simply because he or she doesn’t want to be punished. Don’t overdo it, though. Placing too hard punishments could also lead to destruction of the conscience your child never being able to make it’s own decisions.
I think that giving rules to obey is the best way of influencing young people. Wherever you go, you find certain rules. Not every rule is absolutely sensible, but while growing older, your child will learn by itself which rules should be followed and will follow them of free choice.
Strengths
All content is relevant and well explainedarguments balanced with counterpoints
the writer offers their opinion explaining why
the conclusion consists of a summary of the writer’s opinion
appropriate register (except from imperative form)
coherent text and use of a variety of cohesive devices to show connections between ideas including punctuation
good range of vocabulary
grammar structures are used with flexibility
Weaknesses
The writer offers advice using the imperative, he could have used more complex syntactic structuresDomande da interrogazione
- ¿Cuáles son las dos formas de influir en los jóvenes que se discuten en el ensayo?
- ¿Por qué los adolescentes a menudo ignoran los consejos de sus padres?
- ¿Cómo pueden las reglas ayudar en el desarrollo de la conciencia de un niño?
- ¿Cuál es la opinión del autor sobre la mejor manera de influir en los jóvenes?
El ensayo discute dos formas de influir en los jóvenes: darles reglas para obedecer y ofrecerles consejos.
Los adolescentes a menudo ignoran los consejos porque sienten que sus padres no los entienden y piensan que son "demasiado viejos".
Las reglas ayudan en el desarrollo de la conciencia al enseñar a los niños a distinguir entre lo correcto y lo incorrecto, especialmente cuando hay consecuencias por no seguirlas.
El autor opina que dar reglas para obedecer es la mejor manera de influir en los jóvenes, ya que les enseña a seguir reglas por elección propia a medida que crecen.
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