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Herasi
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Ciao a tutti, ho scritto questo tema in inglese che riguarda la carne e la dieta vegetarian.. il titolo è IT'S BAD EATING MEAT?
Chiedo l'aiuto di esperti che mi correggono la forma ed eventuale lessico e tutto quello che è sbaglia insomma haha:)

In the last years, it has been discussed a lot about eating meat is good or not for our health. There are differents points of view: there's who believes that eating meat is essential for a healthy and efficacious diet; who supports the opposite thinking that the vegetarian chose is the best and who believes that the vegan one is really the best ( the vegetarian diet includes fruits, vegetables, cereals, legums, but also products that are derived from animals like honey,eggs,milk; while in the vegan one, these last things are not allowed).
But it's really bad to eat meat?
It contains essentials nutritives substances for our body, like proteins, vitamins,iron...
In addition, who does much physical activity and doesn't eat meat, there will be problems with resistance and more. This is because meat provides us with important nutrives substances that improve the performance of muscles.
However, it's also true that it introduces fats, cholesterol and carbohydrates involving in this way cardiovascular diseases, diabet, cancers and fatness. Meat may introduces also toxics substances that the animal took during its life.
In alternative, the vegetarian diet tries to replace the nutritives substances contained in meat, introducing other kinds of food.
However, not always it happens, because is really difficult to replace a food so important.
So in my opinion, it isn't wrong to eat meat, because it's fundamental for our body. It's up to all as individuals to have an equilibrated and varied diet, without exaggerating with meat and eating also vegetables, fruits, ecc...

GRAZIE MILLE IN ANTICIPO :):)
Nicky83
Nicky83 - VIP - 5229 Punti
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IS IT BAD TO EAT MEAT?

It has been debated a lot in the last years whether eating meat is good or not for our health. There are different points of view on this topic: there are those who believe that eating meat is essential for a healthy and successful diet and there are those who see it the other way, some believing that being vegetarian is the best choice, others that being vegan is even better (the vegetarian diet includes fruits, vegetables, cereals, legumes and also products that are derived from animals like honey, eggs and milk. These animal products are not allowed in the vegan diet). (occhio a concordare correttamente il verbo con il soggetto)
But is it really bad to eat meat? (occhio all’inversione soggetto verbo nella domanda)
Meat contains nutritive substances which are essential to our body, like proteins, vitamins, iron...
In addition, people who do a lot of physical activity risk incurring into problems with resistance, or more, if they don’t eat meat and this is because meat provides us with important nutritive substances that improve the performance of our muscles.
However, it's also true that meat introduces fats, cholesterol and carbohydrates in our body, thus increasing the risk of cardiovascular diseases, diabetes, cancer and fatness. By eating meat we may also absorb the toxic substances that contaminated the animal during its life. (occhio! Nutritive/toxic substances, non nutritives/toxics… l’aggettivo non viene concordato in numero)
The vegetarian diet tries to replace the nutritive substances contained in meat with alternative substances contained in other types of food. However, this is not always possible and it is really difficult to fully replace such an important food.
So in my opinion, it isn't wrong to eat meat, because meat is fundamental for our body. I think that we should have an equilibrated and varied diet, without exaggerating with meat but also eating vegetables, fruits and legumes in the right measure.

Aggiunto 8 minuti più tardi:

Comunque non andava male. Sono fondamentalmente 3 gli errori grammaticali che hai ripetuto più di una volta (te li ho segnati sottolineati nel testo) e a quelli mi raccomando fai attenzione.
Per il resto ho leggermente modificato alcune frasi di cui non era ben chiaro il senso o il collegamento alla principale. Sei libera di accettare le modifiche o meno, sicuramente ci sarebbero anche altri modi per scriverle (è tutto un po' sempre soggettivo).

Spero di esserti stata utile :)
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